Into the distance, I look at that starThis doesn't have any literary quality but still, I somehow like it. Composed it in my head inside the helmet while on my way to a class. The last line has been intentionally left out of the rhyming scheme to show the disconnect.Its luminous, beautiful and yes it's too farI look at it and wonderAm I on par?The star looked to be in my reachGod saw this and He decided to preachAs he began, I lost my speechMy journey had come under siegeAs always, I accepted my fateWas I early? Wasn't I too late?I feel like a mouse who took a bite at the baitI should have known, no one around is my mateBut He also taught me beliefAnd yes, it alone can carry you through times of griefI know my life is uneventful and briefDoesn't it make sense to follow the Chief?May the star's charm increase manifoldMay its silver-ish streak turn to goldMay He blesses it and give it warmth in coldMay it know that I did exist once!!
Please comment and let me know what you think of it.
15 comments:
awesome!! thr comes a time in all ur lives when we all feel d same way..
very nicely written and quite thought provoking ...
really nicely written :)
I'll post a comment when I get back my words.
Speechless.
You know what, I feel like taking my roommate's bike right now-1 am in the morning-night, and go on a long drive, all alone. May be then I would be able to feel what these words actually mean. Not mean, what these words actually are!
Different from your league. Nice to see you are expanding your horizon. :) KeeepItUP
@anuja - It sure does.
@Dazediva - thanks for the kind comment. Keep visiting. Do check why I can't comment on your blog, I so want to.
@Isha - Thank you :)
@Neha - This will do and it will do very well. :)
blogrolled u !
well written indeed!
really awesome!
what should i say about this dude..
it's simply awesome whenever i think it is your best you always come up with more beautiful thing :)
Hats off to you..
u r sansui (Better than the Best )
coming from your heart. random.. yet trying hard to put in words.... nice reading..!! :-)
dum dee da da
Nicely written! At least better than my first and only poem :P
Keep writing!
By the way, it's high time you update your blog ;-)
hey dude..just passing through....nice composition
nice poem yaar
and u are from ujjain
great chalo koi to hain jo blog karta hain ujjain se
check my blog
http://iamhereonlyforu.blogspot.com/
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